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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes. Summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates differences in import of
tea
 and
coffee
 in 4 different countries, measured in
tonnes
.
Overall
, On average,
the
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coffee
 is imported more
while
 observing the data collectively.
However
, individually
Uk
 imported the largest
amount
 of
Tea
.
Additionally
, it is
notted
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noted
 that US and Canada import the almost exact
amount
 of
Tea
 and
Coffee
. Upon closer examination, on average
coffee
 is a common
go to
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 drink in all mentioned countries where Canada and US
holds
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 a similar position at around 40000. Meanwhile,
UK
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the UK
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 and
Germary
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Germany
 had a different importation, where
UK
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 imported the least
amount
 of
Coffee
, and Germany
bought
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became the largest importer among others.
On the other hand
,
Tea
 was bought comparatively less than
coffee
.
Although
,
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 Canada and
US
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the US
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was
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were
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 observed to import
same
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the same
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amount
in
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of
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Tea
 at 20000
tonnes
,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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brought
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 the largest number of
Tea
 at over 80000
tonnes
while
 Germany gained over 50000
tonnes
 of
Tea become
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tea, becoming
 the second
to
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UK
 in importation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, tonnes, uk, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imports
  • tonnes
  • volume
  • trend
  • contrast
  • pattern
  • average
  • country-specific data
  • significant difference
  • beverage
  • ranking
  • highlight
  • fluctuate
  • proportion
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