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The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph show the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart provides information
of
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 the percentage of weekly patients visiting clinics of a hospital from the
year
 2010 to the
year
 2016. Generally speaking, it can be seen that the rate of clients
rise
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rose
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 in 2012.
Also
 ,the lowest number of
patient
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patients
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 was in
year
 2014 .
Additionally
, in
year
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the year
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2012
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2012,
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 it is clear
to say
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that patients number
has
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of patients
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 dropped . The proportion
diabetic
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of diabetic
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 people in
year
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 2010 was almost the same rate and increased
the
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 following years until 2016.
Furthermore
,
Moreover
, we can see that dental clinics
was
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leveled
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 up in
year
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the year
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 2014
then
it
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rised
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raised
rose
 in 2016 .
In addition
 ,
in
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from
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 the
beganing
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beginning
 of
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the year
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year
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years
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 2012 to 2014 we can see
decreasing
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decrease
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 in the amount of
patient
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patients
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • weekly patients
  • clinics
  • hospital
  • 2010-2016
  • line graph
  • summarize
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • significant changes
  • notable differences
  • similarities
  • yearly fluctuations
  • patterns
  • variations
  • general observation
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