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the map shows the changes in the layout of the self-study area from 2016 to 2018.

the map shows the changes in the layout of the self-study area from 2016 to 2018.
The given images illustrate how a self–study
area
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 of language schools in Vietnam changed, compared to 2016 and 2018.
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, the self-study
area
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 witnessed a number of radical changes with the most noticeable being the equipment of feature rooms and the replacement of destinations on both sides. Regarding the self-study
area
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 in 2016, shelves, the entrance at the top of the
area
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 and the central reception remained unchanged after 2 years. Meanwhile, two-thirds of private self-study rooms were converted into a studio and cafeteria.
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, the cafeteria and bulletin board were set up in the bottom right corner and
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 replaced the manager ‘s office which was relocated to the opposite angle. In terms of the shelves of the West still existed and reduced the size. Not only that, more people rearranged the rectangular tables to create the new space which was spent on laptops and iPads at the centre.
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, the teacher’s desk was equipped in close proximity to the technological
area
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 for over 2 years.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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