The graph below shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
The bar graph down demonstrates the spending on entertainment in Asia and
Europe
and the United States from 1995 till 2000
It is obvious from the graph that all 3 countries had a dramatic rise during the 5 years
However
, the United States had the biggest increase and Europe
was
the lowest
Verb problem
had
According to
what is shown television had an obvious increase in Asia starting at nearly 25 and ending at almost 50 in contrast
, cinema and video were steady during these years overall
Asia had jumped from 67 to 110
On the other hand
television in Europe
had experienced a rise with
almost 45 in 1995 and ended at nearly 55 in 2000,both publishing and music remained,
Change preposition
to
however
, cinema had slight
growth
Correct article usage
a slight
Overall
we can say that Europe
experienced a small change from 1995 with 97 and reaching 131 after 5 years,
The United States experienced the most significant change with 184 in 1995 and reaching 257 in 2000 in other words television was the most clear among others with almost 55 and reaching almost 100 However
publishing and video remained and cinema with music had a slight jump.Submitted by amjadalsamman on
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