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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the annual
consumption
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 rates of three different types of fast food—
hamburgers
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,
pizza
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, and fried
chicken
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—by Mauritian teenagers from 1985 to 2015.
Overall
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, the data reveals a substantial decline in
pizza
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consumption
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 over the 40-
year
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 period,
whereas
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 the
consumption
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 of both fried
chicken
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 and
hamburgers
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 saw a marked increase, with
hamburgers
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 eventually surpassing the other two foods. In 1985, teenagers consumed an average of 10
hamburgers
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 per
year
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.
This
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number
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 doubled by 1990, continuing to rise steadily. By 2000, the
consumption
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 of fried
chicken
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 surpassed that of the other fast foods, reaching 40 times per
year
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. During the same
year
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,
pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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 were consumed approximately 37 times each. From 2000 to 2015,
pizza
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consumption
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 experienced a sharp decline,
while
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hamburgers
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 and fried
chicken
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 became increasingly popular. Notably, after 2010, the
number
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 of
hamburgers
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 consumed annually exceeded that of fried
chicken
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 by 70 times per
year
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. By the end of the period, the annual
consumption
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 of
hamburgers
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 was higher than the
consumption
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 of
pizza
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 in 1985. Interestingly, in 2015, the
number
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 of
hamburgers
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 consumed per
year
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 was equivalent to the
number
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 of pizzas eaten in 1985.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, pizza, chicken, hamburgers, year, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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