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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
consumption
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 patterns of three different types of fast food—Pizza, Hamburgers, and Fried Chicken—by teenagers in Mauritius between 1985 and 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
consumption
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 of Pizza decreased significantly over the
period
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, the intake of both Hamburgers and Fried Chicken saw substantial increases. In 1985, Pizza was the most popular fast food among teenagers, with
consumption
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 at around 60
meals
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 per
year
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.
However
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,
this
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 figure declined steadily throughout the
period
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, dropping to just 10
meals
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 per
year
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 by 2015.
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, Fried Chicken, which started at just under 10
meals
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 per
year
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 in 1985, experienced a sharp rise in
consumption
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, reaching nearly 60
meals
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 per
year
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 by 2005.
After
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this
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 peak, the
consumption
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 of Fried Chicken remained relatively stable until the end of the
period
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. Hamburgers, which were the least consumed fast food in 1985 at about 10
meals
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 per
year
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, saw the most dramatic increase. By 2015, the number of Hamburger
meals
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 consumed per
year
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 had surged to just above 70, making it the most consumed fast food among the three by the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, period, meals, year with synonyms.
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