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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the consumption of three different kinds of junk food by the youngest in Mauritius in a certain period between 1985 and 2015.
Overall
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, it can be pointed out from the chart that, the hamburger was the highest
while
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pizza
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 was the lowest in a specific period.
Also
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, the
pizza
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 descended from 60 to 10 in 2015. Dramatically,
pizza
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 was decreased which was hamburger increased.
According to
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 the chart , fried chicken started at below 10 and jumped up to above 60 between 1985 and 2015.
Thus
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, the fried chicken stayed stable between 2005 and 2010 and it was 60. In the same way, the number of hamburgers went up from 10 to 70 for Mauritius teenagers between 1985 and 2015.
In addition
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,
pizza
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 was 60 which was the biggest in 1985 than other street foods,
in contrast
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, it dropped to 10 and took place the lowest result in different categories between 1985 and 2015.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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