The charts present the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts present  the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts illustrate the average percentages of different nutrients
such
as sodium, saturated fats and added
sugar
in simple everyday foods. The data
taken
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was taken
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from the
statistic
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statistics
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in the USA.
Overall
, it can be seen that at
the
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dinner
the largest amount of nutrients
consumed
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were consumed
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. The first chart
represents
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shows
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that sodium
consumes
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is consumed
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more during
the
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dinner
showing 43% and
snack
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snacks
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, breakfast shows equally 14%.
In addition
through eating
the
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lunch 29% of sodium is consumed. The second chart shows that
dinner
has more percentages of saturated fat
as
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at
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37%,
while
snack
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snacks
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and lunch show almost similar results
as
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at
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21% and 26%, and breakfast contributes 16% of fat. The
last
chart illustrates the proportion of added
sugar
. At
the
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first
glance
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it can be seen that snacks have lots of
sugar
as
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at
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42%,
when
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while
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the typical
dinner
included
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includes
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29% of it,
while
lunch contains 19% and breakfast includes 16% added
sugar
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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