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The diagram below describes the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below describes the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the
lady
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ladybird’s
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bird
’s life cycle and anatomy.
Overall
, there are 4 stages and one material in the whole natural and cyclical life process of
lady
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ladybird
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bird
, which has 8 important
body
 parts. First of all,
adult
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an adult
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lady
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ladybird
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bird
 spawns eggs on the leaf and
embryos
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the embryos
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 of the
lady
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ladybird
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bird
 spend 2-5 days in the egg stage. After that, embryos hatch from eggs and spend 7 days as a pupa. Following that, the pupa develops into the larva and
on
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in
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 the larval stage insect
spend
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spends
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 21 days.
Finally
,
larva
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the larva
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 evolutes into the adult ladybug and a certain time later adult species spawn the eggs.
Secondly
,
ladybug
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the ladybug
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 has 8 important
body
 organs. Four of them
on
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are on
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 the head and
other
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the other
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 four
on
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are on
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 the
another
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other
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 parts.
Lady
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Ladybird
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bird
 has
head
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a head
the head
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 and 2 antennas, 2 eyes and 2 pronotums located on it. An insect had 3 couples of legs, a couple of
wing
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wings
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 and
red
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a red
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 elytra. There is
body
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a body
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 part called an abandon, that
located
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is located
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 on its
body
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lady, bird, body with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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