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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The first picture illustrates the layout of Porth Harbour in 2000,
while
 the second picture shows its current layout.
It is clear that
this
 harbour has undergone significant changes, including the construction of a new dock and the introduction of support facilities. Looking at the information in more detail, in 2000, there was only one dock,
while
 a new dock has been constructed recently.
Moreover
, the marina area and the fishing boats section have been swapped. As can be seen, a new shower and toilet zone has been introduced to the west of the marina area. Located in the south is a car park, with a
road
 leading to the main
road
. Another significant change is that a new café and shops have been introduced and are located to the west of the lifeboat district.
Furthermore
, the disused castle has been replaced with a hotel, with a new
road
 constructed to connect the lifeboat area to the main
road
.
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task achievement
Ensure your introduction includes a brief overview of the main changes, not just the fact that changes occurred.
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Try to include some more detailed comparisons or specific examples of what exactly has changed and the implications of those changes.
coherence cohesion
Work on your conclusion to summarize the main points more effectively.
task achievement
Good job identifying and describing the significant changes made to the harbour.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure, with information presented clearly and systematically.
coherence cohesion
The use of transitional phrases (e.g., 'Looking at... in more detail', 'Moreover', 'Furthermore') helps maintain a smooth flow of ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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