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Below are two charts showing the top 12 nations in military spending for 2005 and those countries' GDP growth for the same year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts compare the military spending of the top 12 nations in 2005 with their
GDP
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growth
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 for the same year.
Overall
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, it is evident that the United States had the highest military expenditure,
while
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 China had the highest
GDP
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growth
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. Other Asian nations
also
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 tended to have higher
GDP
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growth
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 rates than the Western European countries. The United States dominated military spending in 2005, with an expenditure of $400
billion
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, which is five times that of both China and Russia, at $80
billion
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 each. The U.K., France and Japan occupied the third highest position ($50
billion
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), fourth ($40
billion
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) and fifth ($35
billion
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) respectively. Germany's military spending was half that of France. India and Saudi Arabia both spent $10
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,
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 South Korea's expenditure was slightly less at around $8
billion
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.
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, the figures for Italy and Australia were the lowest, at only 5
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 dollars. As regards
GDP
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growth
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 in 2005, China took the lead with a rate of 9%, followed by Russia with 7%. The figures for India and Saudi Arabia were roughly the same (around 6%). South Korea's
growth
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 rate of 5% was marginally higher than that of the United States (4.8%). The figures for Australia, the United Kingdom and Japan were 4%, 3,5% and just over 3% respectively. Meanwhile, France, Germany, and Italy all had the lowest
GDP
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growth
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 at around 2%.
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Your essay does a great job of summarizing the key features of the charts and making relevant comparisons. For an even higher score, consider adding a brief conclusion to summarize your findings.
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You have maintained a logical structure and presented information clearly. However, ensure all sentences within a paragraph flow naturally and are closely related to the main point being discussed.
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You have effectively identified and reported the main features of the charts.
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You have used relevant specific examples to support your main points, which strengthens your response.
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Logical structure and use of paragraphs make your essay easy to follow.

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