The diagram below shows how sugarcanes are processed to get consumable sugar. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given picture illustrates the
sugar
manufacturing Use synonyms
process
using Use synonyms
sugar
cane in several stages.
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Overall
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sugar
cane is turned into Use synonyms
sugar
by seven different processes including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and Use synonyms
finally
drying and cooling.
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Sugar
canes take up to 12-18 months to fully grow, after which harvesting is done either by using machines or Use synonyms
farmers
cutting them. After that, collected Change preposition
by farmers
sugar
canes are transported for the next Use synonyms
process
. The next Use synonyms
process
is crushing, by which Use synonyms
juice
is produced. A machine is used to crush the Use synonyms
sugar
Use synonyms
canes
. Collected Fix the agreement mistake
cane
juice
is purified by using a limestone filter.
Purified Use synonyms
juice
is Use synonyms
then
evaporated by using extreme heat; Linking Words
this
is the Linking Words
process
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to make
syrup from Change preposition
of making
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juice
. Add an article
the juice
Then
, the second-to-Linking Words
last
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process
is centrifuging, in which it separates Use synonyms
sugar
crystals from Use synonyms
syrup
. At Add an article
the syrup
last
, Linking Words
sugar
is stored in a container, in which the Use synonyms
process
of drying and cooling is done. After the final Use synonyms
process
, it is ready.Use synonyms
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