The diagram below shows how sugarcanes are processed to get consumable sugar. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given picture illustrates the
sugar
manufacturing process
using sugar
cane in several stages.
Overall
, sugar
cane is turned into sugar
by seven different processes including growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and finally
drying and cooling.
Sugar
canes take up to 12-18 months to fully grow, after which harvesting is done either by using machines or farmers
cutting them. After that, collected Change preposition
by farmers
sugar
canes are transported for the next process
. The next process
is crushing, by which juice
is produced. A machine is used to crush the sugar
canes
. Collected Fix the agreement mistake
cane
juice
is purified by using a limestone filter.
Purified juice
is then
evaporated by using extreme heat; this
is the process
to make
syrup from Change preposition
of making
juice
. Add an article
the juice
Then
, the second-to-last
process
is centrifuging, in which it separates sugar
crystals from syrup
. At Add an article
the syrup
last
, sugar
is stored in a container, in which the process
of drying and cooling is done. After the final process
, it is ready.Submitted by sarumanandhar36 on
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