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The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
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The diagram gives information about a cyclical process of producing biofuel
which
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called
ethanol
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.
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, there are 9 steps in total that can be divided into 3 main stages: creating
celluose
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cellulose
, manufacturing
ethanol
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 and using
ethanol
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, the cycle repeats after the final
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. In the first
stage
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- creating cellulose, workers have to harvest raw materials from the plants and trees which are grown enough. After that, those materials are sent to a
pre processing
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 machine and they become cellulose.
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 the second
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, cellulose, which is the result of
first
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stage
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, is processed by
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scientists and
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transforms
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to
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 sugars. Microbes are added to the sugars to get the final product-
ethanol
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. In the final
stage
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,
ethanol
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 is used as energy for transportation
such
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 as cars, trucks, planes… CO2 which
called
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 carbon dioxide is a result of using
ethanol
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 and it goes
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 the atmosphere after being released.
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, it combines with the sunlight to become the energy to grow plants and trees and the cycle starts again.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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