The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates drinking
habits
from different
age
groups found in Americans. Never drinker is the most
drinking
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common drinking
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habit, which is found in Americans,
whereas
others
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other
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drinking
habits
experience kinds of
variation
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variations
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in all
age
groups. In the 16-24
age
group, never
drinkers
are about 60%
from
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of
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the total population, light
drinkers
are in the second position for donating about 25%, ex-
drinkers
are 10% and
finally
are the heavy
drinkers
donating approximately only 5%. The 55 to 64 and 64 to 74
age
group
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groups
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experience a similar condition
for
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in
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their drinking
habits
. Both are having never
drinker
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drinkers
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and ex
drinker
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drinkers
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as most of the population,
in
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apply
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the
age
65 to 74 consists nearly 90 % of both drinking
habits
(45% for the never
drinkers
and 45% for
ex
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ex-drinkers
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drinkers
) and
in
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apply
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the
age
of 55 to 64 consists about 75% (about 50% for never
drinkers
and 25% for ex
drinkers
). In conclusion, the majority of drinking
habits
found in Americans are never
drinkers
because it
is
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been
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discovered as the most
drinking
Correct word choice
common drinking
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habits
Fix the agreement mistake
habit
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in all
age
groups.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words habits, age, drinkers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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