Open plan offices offer a better working environment for staff than a normal office. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that
open
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plan
offices
are more advantageous than normal
offices
. In my opinion, normal
offices
have many more advantages than open
plan
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. There are several reasons why I would argue against
open
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plan
.
Firstly
,
open
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plan
offices
are designed to fit all the
employers
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in one place, which leads to over-fitting of the work zone, leaving
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and
less
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personal zones for each employee.
Secondly
, cramming so many people into one space causes headaches and other health problems because of the noise.
For example
, I remember having constant headaches during my experience of working in an open space.
Finally
, I believe that doing work in an open place office will critically affect the efficiency of workers
due to
the toxic community of
such
working environments. I believe that normal
offices
should never be replaced. It is much more beneficial to have a personalised working zone for each employer, where they are not under the pressure of nearby colleagues.
In addition
, working in a normal office environment will significantly increase productivity by eliminating all unnecessary noise. It will
also
make managers' jobs easier by making it easier to find a particular person. If office managers choose normal
offices
instead
of open space
offices
, many thousands of people could be properly equipped and treated. In conclusion, my
vies
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is that CEOs should spend money on
the
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normal
offices
instead
of open
place
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, and it is wrong to waste money on
the
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offices
that will negatively affect the workers.
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Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is good. However, the body paragraphs could benefit from a clearer structure, with each paragraph focusing on a single main point and providing thorough supporting details and examples to validate your arguments.
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While you presented reasons for your stance effectively, some of the explanations could be expanded with more specific examples and evidence. For instance, discuss specific studies or expert opinions that highlight the disadvantages of open-plan offices.
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Strive to provide more comprehensive ideas and consider discussing a counterargument to strengthen your position and demonstrate a balanced view.
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You have done well to present a clear opinion right from the start and maintained it throughout the essay. Your conclusion also reiterates your main points effectively.
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The essay is generally well-organized with a logical flow from introduction to conclusion, making it easy to follow your line of reasoning.

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