During a recent plane jurney, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurant.You talked to him and suggested that you should cantact him about a possible job in one of his restourants. ● remind him when and where you met ● tell him what kind of job you are interested in ● say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dera Mr.Adamson, I am writing to express my
interestings
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interest
in a possible job opportunity at one of your
restaurant
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restaurants
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. We had a conversation
durring
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during
the flight on 12th
march
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March
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.
In addition
to
this
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this,
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you told me that I will
work
one
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in one
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of your
restaurant
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. I am interested in
work
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as a manager. I think you will spend your precious time for searching another manager I am the best
choise
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choice
for
this
position. I love
work
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working
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as
an
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a
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manager. The reason is that I have completed a
managment
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management
dagree
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degree
in a USA. And
Also
I have worked
to
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at
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the
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apply
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another
restaurant
for two years. I left there
due to
low
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the low
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monthly salary And I would like to point out. I am the best
choise
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choice
for the position and I am not only
best
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the best
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choise
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choice
but
also
this
work
is
most
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the most
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suitable
work
in a
restaurant
. Thank you for your time and
consediration
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consideration
. I
lookforward
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look forward
to hearing you soon. Yours sincerely, Raxmon Kamolov.
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task response
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Correct words like 'dera', 'interests', 'durring', and 'restourants' for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs focus on one clear idea. For example, separate your qualifications from your reasons for leaving your previous job.
task response
You included all the necessary details: reminding Mr. Adamson when and where you met, describing the job you are interested in, and explaining why you are suitable for the job.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing which helps to structure the communication effectively.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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