During a recent plane jurney, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurant.You talked to him and suggested that you should cantact him about a possible job in one of his restourants. ● remind him when and where you met ● tell him what kind of job you are interested in ● say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dera Mr.Adamson,
I am writing to express my
interestings
in a possible job opportunity at one of your Correct your spelling
interest
restaurant
. We had a conversation Change to a plural noun
restaurants
durring
the flight on 12th Correct your spelling
during
march
. Capitalize word
March
In addition
to this
you told me that I will Add a comma
this,
work
one
of your Change preposition
in one
restaurant
.
I am interested in Change to a plural noun
restaurants
work
as a manager. I think you will spend your precious time for searching another manager I am the best Wrong verb form
working
choise
for Correct your spelling
choice
this
position.
I love work
as Wrong verb form
working
an
manager. The reason is that I have completed a Change the article
a
managment
Correct your spelling
management
dagree
in a USA. And Correct your spelling
degree
Also
I have worked to
Change preposition
at
the
another Remove the article
apply
restaurant
for two years. I left there due to
low
monthly salary And I would like to point out. I am the best Correct article usage
the low
choise
for the position and I am not only Correct your spelling
choice
best
Correct article usage
the best
choise
but Correct your spelling
choice
also
this
work
is most
suitable Correct article usage
the most
work
in a restaurant
.
Thank you for your time and consediration
. I Correct your spelling
consideration
lookforward
to hearing you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Raxmon Kamolov.Correct your spelling
look forward
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task response
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Correct words like 'dera', 'interests', 'durring', and 'restourants' for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs focus on one clear idea. For example, separate your qualifications from your reasons for leaving your previous job.
task response
You included all the necessary details: reminding Mr. Adamson when and where you met, describing the job you are interested in, and explaining why you are suitable for the job.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing which helps to structure the communication effectively.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.
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