The graph below shows electricity production ( in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

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The given line graph

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illustrates

how much electricity was

producted

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produced

in France from 1980 to 2012. The number is measured in terawatt hours.

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nuclear and renewable increased

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thermal and hydroelectric witnessed an increase.

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, renewables saw the least change over

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period

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. Looking at the

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graph, it can be seen that nuclear produced 70

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in 1980,

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renewables was negligible amount. From 1980 to 2005, nuclear witnessed a significant rise to over 460

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before dropping slightly to 420

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at the end

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. In the meantime, renewables remained on

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until 2005

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this

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figure slightly went up to approximately 25

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in 2010. Moving on to the remaining detail, thermal produced the highest number of electricity in 1980 at 120 tw- h,

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by hydroelectric at 70

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. Over 5 years later, thermal gradually went down to 50

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before witnessing an

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unchanged

until the end of the timeframe. With hydroelectric, it fluctuated between 50

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and 70

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the

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from 1985 to 2005. After that, it declined slightly to 50

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of the

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The graph below shows electricity production ( in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

Today parents spend less free time with their children. Who are more affected?

In the last few decades, there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media should have no right to privacy. To what extent do you agree?

Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many animals are endangered, some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to human. To what extent do you agree or disagree?