The graph below shows electricity production ( in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

The graph below shows electricity production ( in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012
The given line graph
illustates
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illustrates
how much electricity was
producted
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produced
in France from 1980 to 2012. The number is measured in terawatt hours.
It is clear that
nuclear and renewable increased
while
thermal and hydroelectric witnessed an increase.
Additionally
, renewables saw the least change over
period
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time
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. Looking at the
further
graph, it can be seen that nuclear produced 70
tw-h
in 1980,
while
renewables was negligible amount. From 1980 to 2005, nuclear witnessed a significant rise to over 460
tw-h
before dropping slightly to 420
tw-h
at the end
of the
period
. In the meantime, renewables remained on
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unchanged
until 2005
then
this
figure slightly went up to approximately 25
tw-h
in 2010. Moving on to the remaining detail, thermal produced the highest number of electricity in 1980 at 120 tw- h,
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by hydroelectric at 70
tw-h
. Over 5 years later, thermal gradually went down to 50
tw-h
before witnessing an
unchange
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unchanged
until the end of the timeframe. With hydroelectric, it fluctuated between 50
tw-h
and 70
tw-h
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the
period
from 1985 to 2005. After that, it declined slightly to 50
tw-h
at the end
of the
period
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