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A method of manufacturing leather productions is illustrated in the given diagram.

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A method of manufacturing leather
productions
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products
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 is illustrated in the given diagram. In general, there are a total
11
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of 11
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 steps separated
to
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into
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 3 main stages, commencing with drying the raw skins and ending with making leather goods.
Initially
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, the animal
skin
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 is dried and transported to the factory by truck. In the factory,
this
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skin
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 is put in a tank to wash with lime mixture. In the next procedure, washed
skin
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 experiences first soaking in a pure lime tank, before it is brought to the rolling machine to flatten. Following flattening,
this
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skin
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 is
secondly
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 soaked in a tannin tank which is made from vegetable matter. Before
this
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 is sent to another factory , there is a polishing step by a roller to ensure smooth and even.
Last
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 but not least, individuals use
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the truck
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truck
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trucks
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 to bring
this
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 to processing
manufacture
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manufacturers
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 to create daily
productions
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products
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such
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 as bags
and
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apply
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shoes or
sport
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 equipment.
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task achievement
While the essay provides a clear description of the process, ensure to maintain consistent verb tenses. For instance, phrases like 'In the next procedure, washed skin experiences first soaking' could be better structured as 'In the next procedure, the washed skin is first soaked'.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each step is clearly connected to the next using cohesive devices. For example, using words like 'subsequently' or 'afterward' can make the description flow more naturally.
introduction
The introduction clearly presents the topic and provides a brief overview of the process.
logical structure
The essay clearly divides the process into main steps, making it easier to follow along.
supported main points
Specific details, such as the use of lime mixture and tannin tank, add depth to the description.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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