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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the average number of
days
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 with rainfall per
month
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 in two Australian cities:
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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,
while
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 the line chart represents the fluctuations in average daily temperatures in the specified cities.
Overall
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, even though
Canberra
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 witnesses comparatively lower temperatures,
Brisbane
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 experiences more rainfall most of the time throughout the year.
According to
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 the supplied line graph, in
Brisbane
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, the
temperature
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 tends to remain between 20
degrees
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Celsius
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 to 30
degrees
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Celsius
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 in February; the
temperature
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 gap reduces in April, before becoming widened
month
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 on
month
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 till October. The
temperature
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 range restores to its original value by the end of the year in December.
On the contrary
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, the disparity between the highest and lowest
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temperature
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 in
Canberra
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 is extreme; the lowest
temperature
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 recorded in January is recorded to be just below 15
degrees
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Celsius
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whereas
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 the highest number
are
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is
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 at just over 25
degrees
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Celsius
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. The
temperature
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 gap continues to become huge for the rest of the
month
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.
According to
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 the bar chart, showering occurs for approximately half of the
month
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 in the first four and
last
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 months of the year in
Brisbane
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, whilst it rains just well over 6
days
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 in
Canberra
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 during the same months.
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, the summer months, namely June, July, August, September, and October, witness a diametrically opposite trend; showering occurs for precisely 10
days
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 every
month
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,
whereas
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 in
Brisbane
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, just below 10
days
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 are wet.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, month, brisbane, canberra, temperature, degrees, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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