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Some people think distance learning programmes can never be as good as traditional, face-to-face education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #distance #programmes #education
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 education are the best way to learn any
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 or subject.
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 distance learning programs is a special resource now because of flexibility in
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 of time management, cost and accommodation, modern
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technology
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 of
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possibilities
 around the world,
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even though
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these programs
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 are more personalized learning
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 because students can learn at their own pace, revisit materials as needed.
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virtually
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 programs
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 created a lot
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 because all people think that the future
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 be like at the moment of that. But now we continue to observe that the students
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 to go
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class in a room , for different reasons like
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 interaction, learning
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 work. In comparison between
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear structure. Ensure you have a well-defined introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should cover a distinct point with relevant examples and explanations.
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Try to develop your arguments more thoroughly. Provide specific examples and stronger reasons to support your viewpoints.
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You've included a comparison between distance learning and face-to-face education which is a good attempt to address both sides of the issue.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction gives an idea of your stance on the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access and flexibility
  • Time management
  • Adult learners
  • Part-time students
  • Remote areas
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Commuting costs
  • Accommodation
  • Tuition fees
  • Higher education
  • Technological advances
  • Interactive platforms
  • Video conferencing
  • Virtual simulations
  • Engaging learning environment
  • Personalized learning
  • Revisit materials
  • Targeted support
  • Digital tools
  • Social interaction
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Group work
  • In-person discussions
  • Networking
  • Communication skills
  • Hands-on experience
  • Laboratory work
  • Practical experience
  • Traditional classroom setting
  • Comprehensive learning
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