The chart below shows what anthroplogy graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthroplogy graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.
The given chart illustrates the destination of anthropology
graduates
from a university and the table provides
infromation
Correct your spelling
information
regarding the type of
employement
Correct your spelling
employment
and salary after 5 years of work in three different sectors. 52% of
graduates
secured
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
show examples
time
employment upon completion of the course. 15% of individuals engaged in
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
show examples
time
jobs. The
destinaton
Correct your spelling
destination
of 8% of
graduates
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
not known and a similar amount of students started doing
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
show examples
time
post grad
Add a hyphen
post-grad
show examples
study. 12% of
graduates
are unemployed and 5%
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
doing
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
show examples
time
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
postgrad study. After 5 years of work, as a freelance consultant,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
show examples
of students earn more than $75,000,
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
which 40%
recieve
Correct your spelling
receive
and
Correct your spelling
an
show examples
income
more
Change preposition
of more
show examples
than $100,000. In
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
sector, 50% earn more than $100,000 and 30% earn more than $75,000. Only 5% in
freelance
Correct article usage
the freelance
show examples
and government
sector
Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
show examples
earns
Correct subject-verb agreement
earn
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
between $25,00 and $49,999.
On the other hand
, in private companies,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
show examples
of
graduates
recieve
Correct your spelling
receive
an income in between $50,000 and 74,999 followed by 30% of
population
Add an article
the population
show examples
with more than $100,000 and 25% of people with more than $75,000 respectively.
Submitted by sachin.jose0206 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: