The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
The given table represents the three basic foods:
wheat
, maize, and rice, consumed by citizens in four different nations, indicated as a unit of calories per person per day.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that Polish peoples
consume Fix the agreement mistake
people
such
relatively low on average, Correct quantifier usage
apply
whereas
that of the other three regions are
greater. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
However
, it is interesting to note that ratio
of Correct article usage
the ratio
carbohydrates
consumption Change the noun form
carbohydrate
is
Verb problem
apply
varied
Replace the word
varies
depend
on the Change the form of the verb
depending
locations
.
Fix the agreement mistake
location
To begin
with, at about 1,445, Rice was the largest portion consumed by Cambodians among all other nations, followed by egyptians
, Change the capitalization
Egyptians
mexicans
, and Change the capitalization
Mexicans
polishes
, at 501, 57, and 19, respectively. Capitalize word
Polishes
Therefore
, at 1,083, Mexico
Replace the word
Mexican
peoples
consume maize the greatest. Fix the agreement mistake
people
While
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
of in
Egypt accounted for half of Change preposition
apply
Mexico
figures at about 578, the statistics in Cambodia only a tenth of Mexicans at 103. Surprisingly, there is no consumption of maize found in Poland.
In regards Change noun form
Mexico's
with
Change preposition
to
wheat
, Egyptians was
the only group who Change the verb form
were
eat
Wrong verb form
ate
wheat
the highest at 1,095. Moreover
, Polish peoples
and Mexican peoples
are approximately 4/5 and 1/5 of in Egpyt at 865, and 275, respectively. Lastly
, Cambodian people seem to show less interests
in Fix the agreement mistake
interest
wheat
comparing
with other foods at 18.Wrong verb form
compared
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