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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the average closing prices of gold,
platinum
 and
palldium
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palladium
 from 2013 to 2012. In the
year
 2013, the average closing
price
 of
platinum
 is $1500 per ounce,
Additionally
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 the average closing
price
 of gold is almost $1500 per ounce.
Palladium
 was the cheapest among the three precious metals in the
year
 2013.
However
, the
price
 of
palladium
 has exhibited an up and down until 2016. The average
price
 of
Palladium
 has
showed
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shown
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 a steady increase in the following years reaching more than $2500 per ounce in 2021.
On the other hand
, the
price
 of
platinum
 displayed a downward curve reaching less than $1000 in 2017. A slight increase of
little
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 more than $1000 was the average
price
 in the
year
 2021.
In addition
, gold maintained
a prices
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prices
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 between $1000 and 1500 up to 2019, followed by a rise in the
year
 2020.
Platinum
 was the most precious metal in the
year
 2013,
whereas
palladium
 in 2021 and vice versa.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words platinum, year, price, palladium with synonyms.
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