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For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this give details of how you have benefited from the club explain why you want to leave

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Dear Mr Tahli, I am James, and I am writing
this
 letter
for ending
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 my
club
 membership which I have been using
since
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for
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 eight years. There are
variety
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 of things you provide under the different memberships, but at that time I
chosed
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chose
choose
 to be
into
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in
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gold
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a gold
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 group of members. I used to pay the
club
 through my credit card which is
on
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apply
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auto
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the auto
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mendate
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mandate
 option , through
this
 every month an
ammount
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amount
automatically
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 debited from my credit card. So I don't have to be set any
reminder
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 about the late fees or any surcharges. Your
club
 has provided me
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with alot
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alot
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a lot
 of
memries
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memories
 to store in my mind. We are a group of friends
used
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 to do
alot
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a lot
fun
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of fun
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 activities, I am definitely going to miss
spa
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the spa
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 .
Also
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 I love the way
of
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all the staff members treat their clients. I am now leaving
club
 membership,
resons
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reasons
 behind it is that I am shifting my job from Toronto to
Brumpton
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Brampton
. So there is no way left to continue. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Chris Paul
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sentence structure
Ensure clarity in your sentences and consider revising for better grammar and spelling accuracy. For example, 'mendate' should be 'mandate' and 'ammount' should be 'amount'.
task response
Details about why you are leaving are clear, but consider giving a bit more specific information about the new job location and requirements.
structure
Paragraphs should be clearly separated and each should discuss a single main idea. Your letter has good content but can improve in structure by splitting information more distinctly into individual paragraphs.
greeting closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, maintaining a formal tone.
task completion
The letter effectively conveys the reasons for discontinuing the membership and reflects on the benefits in a positive manner.

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