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You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You know find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter in your tutor. Write a letter -describe the situation -explain why you cannot continue at this time - say what action you would like to take

#time #job #part #course #tutor #-describe #situation #-explain #action
Dear sir, It's been six
month
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months
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 now from when you start teaching me . I am writing
this
 to let you know that I
would
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will
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 no
more
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longer
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 be able to take
further
 classes. From
beginning
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the beginning
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 it was never been easy for me to manage my
time
 as you already know about my
full
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full-time
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time
 job. In our corporate banking jobs , our performance is measured on the basis
different
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of different
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qauters
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quarters
 of
financial
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the financial
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 year. At
this
 point
of
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in
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time
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time,
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 we have
maximum
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a maximum
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work load
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workload
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 as compared to
whole
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the whole
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 year as
this
 is
last
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the last
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qauters
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quarters
quarter
 of FY ( jan-march). So it would not be easy for me to do work at
office
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the office
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as well as
 studying. I would like to discontinue
tuitions
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tuition
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 for a short period of
time
 and will rejoin in future for sure. It would be
helpfull
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helpful
also
 if you
can
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could
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 provide me
some
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with some
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 notes so that I can keep in touch with my studies. Hope you will understand my condition and looking forward
for
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 your cooperation. Yours sincerely, Raina
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task achievement
Pay attention to spelling and grammar to avoid errors like 'qauters' instead of 'quarters' and 'helpfull' instead of 'helpful'.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly into paragraphs to ensure better flow and understanding. Each paragraph should represent a single idea.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which suits the context of writing to a tutor.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are correctly formulated, enhancing the overall coherence and cohesion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • juggle multiple commitments
  • recent increase in workload
  • intense/stressful period
  • unmanageable schedule
  • withdraw from the course
  • regretfully cannot continue
  • postpone my studies
  • alternative arrangements
  • flexible study options
  • additional responsibilities
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