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The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.

The pie charts compare how much the proportions of three fast-food outlets are favoured by teenagers in Vietnam and Indonesia in 2017 with projections for 2027.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of adolescents who preferred three different types of fast food restaurants-
McDonald
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's,
KFC
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, and
Burger
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 King- in
Vietnam
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 and Indonesia in 2017, and give forecasts of their preferences in 2027.
Overall
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, in past,
Burger
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 King was popularized dominantly among
teenagers
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 in
Vietnam
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,
whereas
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 the largest sector of
teenagers
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 in Indonesia opted for
McDonald
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's. In the upcoming years,
McDonald
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's is expected to surpass
Burger
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 King in
Vietnam
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,
while
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on the other hand
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, Indonesian
teenagers
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 are anticipated to maintain the trend consistently. Regarding the statistics recorded in 2017 in
Vietnam
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, even though more than half of adolescents (52.8%) vouched for
Burger
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 King, youngsters dining at
McDonald
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's were approximately comparable to
Burger
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 King.
KFC
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,
in contrast
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, was preferred by only a few people (5.1%).
Similarly
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, the data fetched from Indonesia in the recorded year revealed that the highest number of Indonesian people were fond of
McDonald
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's (60.8%), followed by
KFC
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 (23.8%), and
lastly
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Burger
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 King (15.4%).
According to
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 the predictions for 2027,
McDonald
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's is probably going to become the most cherished fast food by Vietnamese adolescents, with over 50% of the
teenagers
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 eating it,
while
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Burger
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 King is anticipated to surrender, with just under 40% of people preferring it. In the same realm of the period, despite being the highest, the popularity of
McDonald
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's is likely to face a decline of almost 12% (48.5%), owing to the forecasted rise of
KFC
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, which possibly would stand at 39.2% precisely.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mcdonald, kfc, burger, vietnam, teenagers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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