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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter. Say which edition and when did the article appear Explain why you lost contact with your friend Say how you want them to help you to get back in touch

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to have some information about the article which was printed on your newspaper of February 19.
This
 was on the second page written by Mr. Chris Pell. The journalist Mr. Pell wrote a story about a social worker named
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Vivian James ,
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 he helped
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poor children in their livings. That person is my best childhood friend ,we
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studied together
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 Rose Marry School, Dublin. At that time I
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 to move 100km away from Dublin for my higher studies and that's the reason that we are separated from each other . I often tried to connect with him but always I failed. I am pretty much sure that your team have
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 and other contact details of Vivian as per for your records. I will be very grateful if your company can give me some of the information. Thanks for giving me the attention and hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Maria
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Structural
To improve logical structure, consider breaking down the information into smaller paragraphs for better readability.
Structural
Ensure you clearly separate each main point into its own paragraph to enhance clarity.
Structural
The greeting and closing are appropriate and respectfully done.
Stylistic
The writing tone is suitable and polite for a formal letter.
Content
The key points of the task are addressed well.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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