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The graphs below show data on Australian trades with three other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show data on Australian trades with three other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided
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diagrams
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 below illustrate the development of
trades
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 between Australia
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and
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 3 other countries. These data were recorded over the
6 year
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 time period from year 2002 to 2008.
Overall
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, the graphs show a mostly linear development with exceptions in upward trends in certain circumstances. Looking
firstly
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 at the numbers of export
trades
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 between the mentioned states, a steady unchanged flow can be seen with China and the US, with numbers remaining at 40 throughout the given time period.
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, an upward trend can be observed in
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trades
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 with Japan, reaching a maximum of around 60 before falling back down to 40.
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, import rates show a somewhat similar trend in countries
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 as the US and Japan, with the
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exception
 of a slight decline in
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trades
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trade
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 around the year 2008 in Japan.
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,
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 the numbers with China decrease rapidly by over a half between 2002 and 2005, they continue to climb upwards reaching the maximum amount out of all the recorded participants.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trades with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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