The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The  diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the procedures
of
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how
plastic
bottles
are recycled.
Overall
, it is evident that there are 9 steps from the unused
bottles
collected to become the
end
products. The process began
from collect
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with collecting
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the
bottles
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bottle's
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trash.
First,
plastic
bottles
on
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in
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the bin will
transport
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to the recycling centre with a garbage truck. In the centre, the workers separate which
bottles
that still available to recycle. After the
bottles
ready
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are ready
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,
it
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they
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goes
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to the compressing machine that
built
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blocks. They are
then
shredded into small
plastic
particles before
continue
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continuing
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to process. The
plastic
pellets are produced,
then
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and then
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they
heated
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are heated
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and burned to form raw material.
Finally
, the raw materials are set before
move
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to the
end
of the cycle. It can be used to produce
end
products
such
as
t-shirt
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t-shirts
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,
bag
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bags
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,
pen
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pens
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, et cetera. These whole processes are
the
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apply
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cyclical steps so the
end
products that
already
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are already
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made could
re-processing
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be processed
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again.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles, end with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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