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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel.When you returned home you found you had left some important papers at a hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel.In your letter Say where you think you left the papers Explain why they are so important Tell the manager what you want him/her to do

#hotel #home #papers #manager
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to ask
one
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 of the important
documents
were
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 left in your
hotel
.Yesterday I went to your
hotel
 for an essential meeting.Please
hotel
 manager call me
for
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about
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this
 situation. When I got home I found that my
documents
 were left in your office and I immediately tried to contact you.I can't remember where I put them now but I'm sure you can help me with that.
Also
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 I left the papers by the front door of your
hotel
 and went into the kitchen to have coffee.So maybe you can look for them there. Dear manager these
documents
 were the contract papers for my work.If possible, please let the
hotel
 administration help me find the papers.
Recpectable
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Respectable
 manager I only ask you to find these
documents
 of mine.If the
hotel
 management finds these items, please call me.I will definitely give you something as a reward. I look forward to from you soon. Yours faithfully, Toshtemirova Shakhnoza
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task achievement
In your letter, be more specific about where you think you left the papers. Instead of saying 'maybe you can look for them there,' try to be more certain or provide additional possible locations. This will help the manager understand the situation better.
coherence cohesion
There are a few awkward phrasings and small grammatical errors that could be easily corrected. For example: 'Recpectable manager' should be 'Respected manager,' and 'I look forward to from you soon' should be 'I look forward to hearing from you soon.'
coherence cohesion
You successfully included a clear greeting and closing, which are essential parts of a letter.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the problem, why the papers are important, and what actions you wish the manager to take, covering all the main tasks asked for.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam,
  • I am writing to inform you that I believe I left some important papers at your hotel.
  • To the best of my recollection, I left the papers in the conference room.
  • These papers are of utmost importance as they contain confidential business information.
  • I kindly request that you or your staff check the conference room and securely send the papers to my address.
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