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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007 , 2011, and 2015.” Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007 , 2011, and 2015.” Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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This
 bar chart shows the
figure
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figures
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 of households in America by their annual earnings in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
,
groups
 of less than $25000, $25000 to $49999 and $100000 or more have high figures compared to the other two
groups
. Focusing first on the section of $100000 or more, the number of
this
 had
a
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the
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 highest
figure
, which was nearly 30
millions
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million
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 in 2007.
While
 it was excessed by the
figure
 of less than $50000
two
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in two
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groups
 in 2011, it consisted large amount of the total number of households again in 2015.
By contrast
, the two
groups
where
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whose
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their
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apply
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annual income
are
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is
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 $50000 to $99999
experience
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experienced
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 no significant changes during
this
 period. The group of $75000 to $99999 has been
in
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apply
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the worst in terms of the number of
family
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families
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.
In addition
, the group of $50000 to 74999 have
a
Correct article usage
the
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 same
figure
, which is approximately 20
millions
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million
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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