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The table below shows the result of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the result of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart provides
the
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information about the poll results in McGill University over a
period
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 of 10 years.
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, it is noticeable that the results of the questionnaire for sports and social facilities remained stable throughout the years.
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, student service is the highest
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 the range of modules offered was the least.
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 with, from 2005 to the end of the
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, we can see that the teaching quality in
this
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 academy increased slightly from 74 to 78 only,
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 the outcome of the library resources
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a
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fluctuation from 86 to 88 and after to 87 at the same
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.
In addition
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, the
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 feature is the student services which experienced a dramatic rise from only 54 to 95 throughout the three years. Regarding the other 2 types of information, unlike the student services, the range of modules offered decreased steadily from 39 units to just 25.
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, it is clearly obvious that
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 of the sports and social facilities stayed the same over the given
period
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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