The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The bar chart provides information concerning the

population

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and

wealth

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shared

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by different

kind

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kinds

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of nationality. Generally speaking, the number of

welth

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wealth

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in North America reached the high of 34% per year

.followed

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followed

by,Europe with almost 30%

fugure

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figure

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, India and Africa

has

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almost hit a low of

wealth

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.Next,the

asian

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Asian

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community have much knowledge about

population

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as well,China with

over

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21%.

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, it

clear

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to say that North America has a

fell

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wealth

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comparsing

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comparison

comparing

with the

population

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,Africa has dropped sharply in

population

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followed by India within a number 0.3 .

Morover

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Moreover

, Latin America and

Caribbean

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the Caribbean

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both

has

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have

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a striking similarities

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striking similarities

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in statistics with almost over 5%.

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, Rich Asia-Pacific has

pliunged

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plunged

to almost 25% in

wealth

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However

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth, share with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

125 words

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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while others say that they should think more realistically about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the country side is decreasing. Do you think this a positive or negative development.

Home-schooling is becoming increasingly popular as more and more parents are choosing to educate their children in this way. Why do you think parents might choose home-schooling rather than traditional schools? Do you think home-schooling is more beneficial?