The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

write at least 150 words.
The bar chart provides information concerning the
population
and
wealth
share
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by different
kind
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kinds
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of nationality. Generally speaking, the number of
welth
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wealth
share
in North America reached the high of 34% per year
.followed
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followed
by,Europe with almost 30%
fugure
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figure
.
However
, India and Africa
has
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almost hit a low of
wealth
share
.Next,the
asian
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Asian
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community have much knowledge about
population
share
as well,China with
over
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at over
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21%.
Also
, it
clear
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to say that North America has a
fell
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in
wealth
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in
comparsing
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comparison
comparing
with the
population
share
.
Furthermore
,Africa has dropped sharply in
population
share
followed by India within a number 0.3 .
Morover
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Moreover
, Latin America and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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both
has
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have
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a striking similarities
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striking similarities
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in statistics with almost over 5%.
In addition
, Rich Asia-Pacific has
pliunged
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plunged
to almost 25% in
wealth
share
.
However
,
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth, share with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.

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