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Band 3

You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons. •Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need •explain how you will keep up to date while you are •suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#work #month #•explain #reason #leave #length #date #•suggest
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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to inquire about rest. Because I worked a lot. I will rest in
october
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October
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. I miss my family. Because They live far away from me. They missed me too. I want to see my relatives and family. I have not spent time with my family. They are waiting for me. That was my goal. I told them I would go soon. I can
work
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 online from home if you want. After
rest
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rest,
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 I will go
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work
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to work
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 only on
the
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apply
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time. Before I went to
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 late one hour.
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 on time. I am tired. I will
work
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 online
only
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for only
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 three
hour
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hours
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 at home. If you want, do not give
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 month's salary. Another person will
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 for me temporarily.
Last
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 month I taught him the
work
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. You do not pay that boy. I will pay his salary.I
work
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 overtime after coming back from vacation. I look forward to hearing you! Yours faithfully, John Jacob
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task response
Be clear about your leave dates and provide a more organized explanation of how you plan to stay updated.
coherence and cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion to improve the structure of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Use more complex sentences and diverse vocabulary to enhance your writing style and improve clarity.
task response
You clearly express your intention to stay up-to-date with work responsibilities even while on leave.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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