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The charts below give information about the amount of electricity used.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the amount of electricity used.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the demand for
electricity
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 on a
daily-basis
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daily basis
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 and
on
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in
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 two
diffrent
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different
 seasons and the pie chart provides details about how
electricity
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 is being consumed.
Accoording
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According
 to the chart the daily need
of
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for
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electricity
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 on a regular
winter
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 day is about double
of
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apply
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it
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that
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 on a typical
summer
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 day with the demand reaching
near
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nearly
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 50000
units
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 of
electricity
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 on a
winter
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 day but only about 20000
units
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on
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in
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summer
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. In
winter
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 the demand
flacutates
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fluctuates
fluctuate
 heavily and the margin between its minimum and its peak is about a staggering 20000
units
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 in the
summer
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,
however
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 , it
more
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is more
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 or less the same with the gap between the
minimium
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minimum
 and maximum
boardering
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bordering
 on only 5000
units
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. Onto the
consumptaion
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consumption
part
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part,
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 we can gather that more than half of the
electricity
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 is being used
on
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in
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heating
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the heating
a heating
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 sector with a massive 52.5
percent
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per cent
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 which is more than all other sectors combined.Among other sectors
overns
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ovens
governs
, kettles and washing machines are the second most demanding of
electricity
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that
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apply
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stands
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standing
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 at 17.5
percent
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per cent
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. Following it are lighting and vacuum cleaners that share the same
percantage
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percentage
 of all the
electricity
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 used with both
cosuming
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consuming
 15
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
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 , it is apparent that the
consumptaion
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consumption
 of
electricity
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 in
winter
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 is considerably more than in
summer
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 which does
makes
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make
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 sense considering most of
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electricity
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the electricity
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 is being used to heat up the rooms and water.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, winter, summer, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity consumption
  • Kilowatt-hours (kWh)
  • Energy demand
  • Power grid
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Non-renewable energy sources
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Conservation efforts
  • Industrial sector
  • Residential sector
  • Commercial sector
  • Fluctuation
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Efficiency improvements
  • Seasonal variation
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