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You have just arrived in an English speaking country to study a course. Before you left your English teacher invited you to a dinner • thank him for the dinner • tell him about your studies • say how this advice helped you

#english #country #study #course #teacher #dinner #studies #advice
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my deepest gratitude to you for inviting me over
dinner
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 for the final goodbye. I shall forever be thankful to you for making me fluent in the language, and
achieve
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 my goal. I highly appreciate your gesture
for
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 having me at your place, we all had a great evening shared some laughs and collected everlasting memories. I just reached
london
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London
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couple
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 of weeks ago , so far I have enrolled myself and completed the university orientation.
Moreover
, I have
also
 registered myself
into
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reader's
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 club to socialize with
like minded
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 people and make some friends in
this
 new country . The academic routine which they follow is quite different
then
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than
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 what we have back there. I have attended
few
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 beginner's classes to familiarize myself , but thankfully
i
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I
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 was able to grasp everything without any hesitation. I would
also
 like to point out that all your
advices
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advice
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have
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 helped me
alot
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a lot
. The way you prepared me for the immigration interview, helped me ease into the whole process and yielded comfortable travel .
Nevertheless
, upon your
suggestion
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i
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I
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 worked on my accent and honestly
i
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I
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 don't have any difficulty blending in crowds . Just because of your dedication
i
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I
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 am able to survive in
this
 country and
i
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 will regard you forever. Hope to hear from you soon! Thanks for all the help. Yours Truly, Pranav Dhawan.
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coherence cohesion
While your letter is well-organized, consider breaking your text into more distinct paragraphs for each point. This will enhance readability and coherence.
task achievement
When mentioning the advice from your teacher, be more specific about what exactly was useful. This will demonstrate a clear and comprehensive response to the prompt.
task achievement
You have provided a complete response to the prompt, addressing all three points required.
coherence cohesion
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for the context.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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