Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in word, picture, music or films) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is an irrefutable fact that in the contemporary world, every artist is enjoying their life
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their terms. It is considered by some exponents, that authorities did not pose any limitation on creators in terms of
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which they are displaying on different platforms. I do agree with
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to set some
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for these individuals.
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along with
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excess to different social media
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which
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their connectivity
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all over the world and these days humans are using social sites for earning.
As a result
, they are posting
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pictures, words and even movies on the internet to get more views from
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, which directly and indirectly
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the youth because they are following the same which they are watching on phones.
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people are sharing their nacked
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pictures
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on
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and they
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this
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artistic skill. Since
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did not
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any limitations
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unethical acts without any hesitation.
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it is
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duty of the public officials to guide their citizens towards the right path by establishing enough rules against wrong acts. To explain, it is important to create
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awareness
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which are prohibited and punishable in
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society.
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, if
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artist
promote
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drugs or
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through their films or
musics
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music
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are accountable for
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prisonment
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imprisonment
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although
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a
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freedom to share their opinion, it is
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responsibility of authorities to inform them
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difference between wrong and right
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of
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