The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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key information about the principal issues across various United Kingdom regions in 2008. The units are measured in percentages.

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the highest percentage among the other categories reaching 58%.

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, educational programs show slightly lower percentages

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medical services, fluctuating between 45% and nearly 52%.

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, in London and Glasgow, the proportions for learning and training soared

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those of medical systems by 2 to 4 percentage points. Meanwhile, air pollution ranks the lowest, with a rate of approximately 10% and below.

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, Belfast and Cardiff are the towns with the most traits of concerns about health services with 59% and 57% respectively.

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are slightly more serious troubles in New

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, Birmingham and Manchester,

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education and training.

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, there is no significant difference in the graphs for learning and training, all exceeding 50

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except for Newcastle and Manchester with both around 45%. In spite of the riskiness of the two problems, air pollution is a minor trouble in all seven cities

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different rates.

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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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