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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The previous pie chart illustrates in percentages the amount of people who visited four kinds of tourist attractions in the UK in 1999.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that "Theme
Parks
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" and "Museums & Galleries" had the biggest popularity.
In contrast
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, "Wildlife
Parks
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 & Zoos" got the least number of visitors followed by "Historic Houses & Monuments". On one hand, "Theme
Parks
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" demonstrated the most significant percentage with 38%.
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 attraction, "Blackpool Pleasure Beach" recorded many more guests than any other area, with 47%, followed by "Alton Towers" and "Pleasureland, Southport" with 17% and 16%, respectively.
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, inside the "Theme
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" attraction, "Legoland, Windsor" depicted a lower tourist figure than any other area, with
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10%, followed by "Chessington World of Adventures" with
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20%.
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 "Wildlife
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 & Zoos" exhibited the lowest portion with 9%, "Historic Houses and Monuments" surpassed its growth with 16%.
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