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The table below shows the amount spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the amount spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the number of
beds
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 per thousand of
population
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the population
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whereas
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 the table compares the amount of money that the governments in three nations spend on individuals and the average longevity.
Overall
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, Japan has much more
beds
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 than any other examined countries, followed by Germany and
Netherlands
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while
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 there is not a significant change in other nations. It
also
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 seems that the government expenditure on
health
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 is the largest in the United
States
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although
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 Japanese life expectancy is the longest regardless of the least
health
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 spending. Starting with the bar graph, Japan has the most
beds
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 in hospitals as it has 14
beds
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while
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 Germany comes second at 8, followed by the
Netherlands
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 with just over 4.
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, there is not a significant change in the number of hospital
beds
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 available in other nations with about 4
beds
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 in Australia
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 other countries stand below that with the United
States
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 having the least. Turning to the table of
health
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 spending, the government in the United
States
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 spends the most with $6,719, which is almost double as
Netherlands
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 whose spending is $3,481. The Japanese life expectancy is the longest at 83 regardless of the small amount of government funding of $2,581.
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, the life expectancy in the United
States
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, whose spending on
health
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 is the largest, is the shortest at 78
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 people in the
Netherlands
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 live until 80 on average.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beds, netherlands, health, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Per capita spending
  • Healthcare allocation
  • Healthcare budget
  • Public healthcare funding
  • Private healthcare expenditure
  • Healthcare system efficiency
  • Expenditure patterns
  • Spending trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Economic indicators
  • Benchmark spending levels
  • Policy-driven healthcare spending
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