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The chart below shows the number of different kinds of vehicles registered in Europe from 1996 to 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of different kinds of vehicles registered in Europe from 1996 to 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the total quantities of vehicles, namely
privated
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private
cars
, motorbikes, public
transports
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transport
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, and other types, which were registered in Europe and how these
datas
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data
 changed between 1996 and 2006. From an
overall
 perspective, there was a sharp increase in the total number of private
cars
,
while
 motorbikes,
bus
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buses
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,
coach
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coaches
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,
taxi
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taxis
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, and lorries witnessed a reverse trend at the same time. Noticeably, private
cars
 were by far the most common vehicle of Europeans in terms of commuting. Looking at
data
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 about motorcycles in the graph, there was a decrease of 400,000, from one million in the first studied year to just 600,000 in the final year, equal to
40
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a 40
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% change.
Additionally
, the figures for lorries saw the same trend, but slighter with a drop of 20% which was equal to 100,000 in total.
However
, the use of public transportation
such
 as
bus
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buses
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,
coach
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coaches
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, and
taxi
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taxis
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 gave the same data throughout the 10-year period, with 100,000 vehicles stable. Private
cars
 were the main means of transport, staying at 19 million in 1996 and peaking
24
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at 24
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 million in the next 10 years. The amount of
this
mean
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means
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 experienced a
rose
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rise
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 of 26.32%
while
 those of other types generally increased
500,000
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by 500,000
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, equal to
one twelfth
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one-twelfth
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 compared to the number of private
cars
.
However
, it was an upward trend in terms of registered vehicles by
the
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that
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 time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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