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WRITING The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart compares the
consumption
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 of four various types of
meat
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 in one European particular state over a period of 25 years.
Overall
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, we can notice that at the beginning of
this
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 given time, beef was the primary source of
meat
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;
however
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, it saw a decline and the
consumption
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 of chicken reached its peak
at the end
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.
To begin
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, from 1979 to 1989, beef was the most famous sort of
meat
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, which's
consumption
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 started from just 200
grams
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 per seven days per human and it saw a fluctuation to 1989,
whereas
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 chicken intake increased rapidly from just below 150
grams
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 to around 200
grams
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 per individual per
week
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 in 1989. It is noticeable that
consumption
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 of beef decreased dramatically by twice from around 200
grams
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 to 100
grams
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 per
week
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 from 1989 to the end of the given time, meanwhile, eating of chicken reached its peak at around 250
grams
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 per individual a
week
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 in 2004. Regarding to two other types of
meat
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,
consumption
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 of lamb experienced a moderate decline over the period from 150
grams
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 per member of
family
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the family
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 to approximately 70
grams
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 per person per
week
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.
In addition
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, we can see that there was a steady decrease in fish intake in the same period from just above 50
grams
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 per human per
week
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 to around 40.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, meat, grams, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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