The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line graph compares
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
tourists
who visit
and from the Wrong verb form
visited
UK
amount over a period of 20 years, and the bar chart gives information about the popular destinations of UK
residents
in 1999.
According to
the bar chart in 1999
the Add a comma
1999,
UK
was mostly visited by France and Spain among 3 other top countries
.Whereas
, the line graph shows that number
of the UK
residents
Correct pronoun usage
who visited
visited
other Wrong verb form
visit
countries
is more than the number
of visits to the UK
by overseas residents
.
It is clear that
in 1999 the UK
residents
favourite tourist destinations were France and Spain by far compared to the USA, Greece and Turkey.To be precise,12 million Change noun form
resident's
residents'
UK
tourists
visited France and with
8 Correct word choice
apply
millions
did the same with Spain.Change to singular
million
Whereas
, approximately 3 to 4 millions
visited Change to singular
million
other
3 Correct article usage
the other
countries
.
It is obvious that the number
of tourists
from the UK
overtook the number
of visitors to the UK
from other countries
over a full period. To be fair, in 1979 the statistics of those two groups were not that different,there was almost 2
or 3 million gap and lasted until 1986.Since 1986 Correct article usage
a 2
number
of Correct article usage
the number
tourists
from the UK
started gradually increasing,however
,even the opposite group of people did the same,they were doing with a small change in number
, and in the end
the gap between the two categories was 24 million people.Add a comma
end,
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