You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter Introduce yourself. Say why you are interested in this sports club. Ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members,costs

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Dear Ali, I am writing to inquire about

join in

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your private sports

club

course

. I

have planned

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plan

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to commence soon a

course

. I am hoping you

would

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teach me some skills and knowledge. My name is Javohir Pulatov and now I am studying 10th grade in fifth school

Muborak

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in Muborak

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city

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.My major is boxing and I have experience from boxing

course

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courses

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. My

last

boxing

course

hasn't

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amenities

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and there

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not

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discipline like other boxing

club

courses. There I had attended two years until my patience filled up. In my childhood my father took me to boxing matches and in my heart have

interest

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in boxing

then

work

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hard on myself and my father took me nearest private boxing

club

in Karshi which is named Mike Tayson

juniors

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. There

have

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a lot of teenagers like me. My first boxing coach is Martin Edagard who is coach the

Mike

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Tayson

juniors

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boxing

club

.Martin is

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the person who made me interested in boxing. What kind of conditions,equipment and what kind of environment will be reflected in your boxing classes

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I look forward to hearing from you soon Best regards Pulatov Javohir

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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8 paragraphs

191 words

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Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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