You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter Introduce yourself. Say why you are interested in this sports club. Ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members,costs

Dear Ali, I am writing to inquire about
join in
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your private sports
club
course
. I
have planned
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to commence soon a
course
. I am hoping you
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teach me some skills and knowledge. My name is Javohir Pulatov and now I am studying 10th grade in fifth school
Muborak
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in Muborak
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city
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.My major is boxing and I have experience from boxing
course
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. My
last
boxing
course
hasn't
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amenities
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and there
is
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not
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discipline like other boxing
club
courses. There I had attended two years until my patience filled up. In my childhood my father took me to boxing matches and in my heart have
interest
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in boxing
then
I
work
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hard on myself and my father took me nearest private boxing
club
in Karshi which is named Mike Tayson
juniors
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. There
have
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a lot of teenagers like me. My first boxing coach is Martin Edagard who is coach the
Mike
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Tayson
juniors
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boxing
club
.Martin is
also
the person who made me interested in boxing. What kind of conditions,equipment and what kind of environment will be reflected in your boxing classes
.
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I look forward to hearing from you soon Best regards Pulatov Javohir
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Logical Structure
Ensure the letter includes a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The structure could be improved by separating the introduction, your background, and questions into distinct paragraphs.
Complete Response
Pay attention to grammar and punctuation for a more polished and professional appearance.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of your letter is suitable for a formal request. You balanced politeness with direct questions well.
Complete Response
You included a personal background story that adds context and interest, and explained your long-time interest in boxing.

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