You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter Introduce yourself. Say why you are interested in this sports club. Ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members,costs

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Dear Ali, I am writing to inquire about

join in

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your private sports

club

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course

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. I

have planned

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plan

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to commence soon a

course

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. I am hoping you

would

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teach me some skills and knowledge. My name is Javohir Pulatov and now I am studying 10th grade in fifth school

Muborak

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in Muborak

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city

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.My major is boxing and I have experience from boxing

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course

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courses

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. My

last

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boxing

course

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hasn't

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amenities

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and there

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not

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discipline like other boxing

club

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courses. There I had attended two years until my patience filled up. In my childhood my father took me to boxing matches and in my heart have

interest

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an interest

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in boxing

then

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work

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hard on myself and my father took me nearest private boxing

club

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in Karshi which is named Mike Tayson

juniors

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. There

have

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a lot of teenagers like me. My first boxing coach is Martin Edagard who is coach the

Mike

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of Mike

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Tayson

juniors

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boxing

club

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.Martin is

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the person who made me interested in boxing. What kind of conditions,equipment and what kind of environment will be reflected in your boxing classes

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I look forward to hearing from you soon Best regards Pulatov Javohir

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Logical Structure

Ensure the letter includes a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The structure could be improved by separating the introduction, your background, and questions into distinct paragraphs.

Complete Response

Pay attention to grammar and punctuation for a more polished and professional appearance.

Suitable Writing Tone

The tone of your letter is suitable for a formal request. You balanced politeness with direct questions well.

Complete Response

You included a personal background story that adds context and interest, and explained your long-time interest in boxing.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

191 words

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