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You are planning a vacation and would like to rent a holiday home for a week. Write a letter to the property owner. In your letter: Explain the purpose of your visit. Describe the type of accommodation you are looking for. Ask for more information about the property and the surrounding area.

Dear Madam or Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well.My name is Pouria Sharifzad and I am writing to ask about a place to stay for a week
on
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apply
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next month.I am travelling to
london
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London
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 to
paticipate
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participate
 in a job conference about software programming. As my family is coming with me too , I believe that we need an apartment or a house with two or three beds.
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,I rather
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have the
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the
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a
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 place to have
kitchen
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a kitchen
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 and a playing yard for the kids.I
also
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 need free internet service and a cable
tv
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TV
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.My budget for the accommodation is about 2000 dollars and of
course
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course,
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 the lower price is better . I would
appriciate
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appreciate
 it if you
can
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could
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 provide me with
furthur
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further
 information about your cases and the price of each one.
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,could you please inform me about facilities around the neighbourhood
such
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 as shopping malls ,
cinema
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cinemas
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 and
theaters
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theatres
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 or parks
.
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I am looking for your
respond
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response
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 until tomorrow . Yours sincerely, Pouria Sharifzad

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coherence cohesion
In the first sentence, add a space after the period to improve readability. Example: I hope this letter finds you well. My name is...
coherence cohesion
Correct typographical errors to make the text easier to understand and more professional. Examples: 'paticipate' should be 'participate', 'furthur' should be 'further', and 'respond' should be 'response'.
task achievement
While the response is complete, you could specify the dates of your stay for clarity. Example: '...to ask about a place to stay from [start date] to [end date] next month.'
suitable writing tone
The letter has a clear structure and a professional tone that suits the purpose of inquiry.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, making the letter easy to follow.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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