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The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show Australian dollars in Australia’s trade in three nations from 2004 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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charts
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dipects
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depict
the dollars of
austalian
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Australian
Australia
 from 2004 to 2009 , it is clear from the graph that we have
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the
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 level
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 a per cent
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from
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 2002 to 2005
Also
 undergo
increase
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 per cent
at
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 2008 .
According to
 what is shown figure phase rise in the chart
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the
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import
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imports
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,
Fisrt
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First
, the
counrty
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country
 mostly
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 to
import
 some things
for example
, some food and clothes
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 some things
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country
did
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it
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and can not to providing it and
their
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 should
import
 it out side from the another
country
. So, we have
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rocketed
rocked
 in the per cent of
import
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imports
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 on the chart .
While
 comparison the
export
 it
had
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 remain the
export
then
 had to increase and the reason like we need some
thungs
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things
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they
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Moreover
the
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export
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 can we have
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more
of
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money with it, and a lot of things
had
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increase
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of
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 the dollar in
US
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the US
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that
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why some
country
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countries
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had
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have
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 rise a
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in export
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export
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exports
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In addition
, the
import
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imports
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 and
export
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exports
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 we can make a
country
 without there .
To sum up
, in my
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make
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export
 and
import
 a dollar with the
wourld
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world
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not
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 sure if
australia
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Australia
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 have
same
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words import, country, export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade surplus
  • trade deficit
  • bilateral trade
  • exports
  • imports
  • economic relationship
  • year-on-year growth
  • trade volume
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnation
  • commodities
  • market forces
  • import/export ratio
  • financial quarter
  • trade barriers
  • tariff
  • free trade agreement
  • economic indicators
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