The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart
exposes
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shows
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how many times
youngers
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youngsters
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from one country used different types of transportation in 1990 and 2010.
It is clear that
the usage of all types of transportation decreased from 1990 to 2010 the usage of except car. The
majorty
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majority
of the
childern
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children
used their foot to walk to school in 1990
while
the car was
most
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popular way of transport from and to school in 2010. In fact, the number of
trips
through walking dropped dramatically from 13
million
in 1990 to 6
million
in 2010.
On the other hand
, the usage of
car
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to go to and from
the
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school had significantly increased by almost triple from 4 in 1990 to 11
million
trips
in 2010.
In addition
, cycling and walking and bus were almost at the same level of popularity in 1990 at around 6
million
trips
yearly.
However
, in 2010 these two figures decreased to 2 and 3
million
trips
yearly respectively.
Also
, the ultimate use of
bus
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declined slightly in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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