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The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.

The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.
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The line graph shows how much
foriegn
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foreign
visitor
 to New Zealand
payed
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paid
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according to
 their countries in 18 years time
interval
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intervals
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.
Ooverall
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Overall
,
Austraian
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Australians
 were the most
visitor
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visited
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 in
expenditure
 rate throughout the
period
. For
the
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apply
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most of the
period
,
visitor
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visitors
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fron
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from
china
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China
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were
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had
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 the lowest
expenditure
comperaed
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compared
with
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to
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 other
conunty
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countries
 visitorm except for the interval from 2001 to 2005 when
visitor
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visitors
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 were the lowest.
According to
 the data,
japanees
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Japanese
visitor
expenditure
 doubled from 1996 to 2002
then
 decreased gradually
untill
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until
 the end of the
period
.
whlie
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while
 USA
visitor
expenditure
 increased
considerablly
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considerably
 reach the peak at almost 1800 NZS IN 2010. After that,
its
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it
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 dropped sharply.
Lastly
, the
Austraian
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Australian
visitor
expenditure
 experienced
asignificant
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a significant
significant
 variation. from 1996 to 2006,
its
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it
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show
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shows
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 an
up ward
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upward
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 trend
untill
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until
 2500 NZW, after that it was in a fluctuation
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitor, expenditure, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • visitor spend
  • over a period of
  • eighteen years
  • between 1996 and 2014
  • general trend
  • observed
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuations
  • a breakdown of
  • spending habits
  • comparison
  • highest spenders
  • lowest spenders
  • possible reasons
  • economic conditions
  • tourism promotions
  • significant events
  • specific significant peaks
  • drops in spending
  • corresponding years
  • impact of external factors
  • global financial crisis
  • natural disasters
  • summarizing
  • overall trend
  • implications
  • tourism industry
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