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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending
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The pie chart shows the proportion of the location of
dance
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classes
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 for young people in a small town in Australia. The bar chart gives information about the types of
dance
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classes
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 different
age
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 groups were involved in.
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, a large proportion of the
age
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group
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 attended private studios for
dance
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classes
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.
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, ballet
dance
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classes
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 had the highest number of
students
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 under the 11
age
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group
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 and modern
dance
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classes
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 had the highest in the 11-16
age
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group
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. In detail, 18% of young people in a small town in Australia attended community halls and others for their
dance
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classes
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.
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 the proportion of people who went to private studios was 48%. School halls that are after school accounted for 24% and
lastly
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, college-based studios accounted for a relatively smaller location of 10%.
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, around 600
students
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 in the
age
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group
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 of 11-16 attended ballet, compared to tap
dance
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 with about 410
students
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, and modern
dance
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 was the least with about 300
students
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.
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,
students
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 under 11 were more interested in modern
dance
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 with over 520
students
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. Ballet and tap
dance
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 had about 300 and 410
students
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, age, group, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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