The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.

The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.
The pie chart provides data about
coffee
in three main fields
that
is
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consumption, amount of making and income all around the world.
Overall
, it can be seen that in the first pie, the highest percentage belongs to Europe,
while
in the second to South Africa. The third chart that shows the profit where the greatest was from Delivering.
To begin
with, the majority part Europeans
that is
41 per
cent
consume
coffee
,
while
the lowest is 8 per
cent
in Japan. In the USA 39 per
centof
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cent of
citizens drink
coffee
and 12 in other parts of the Earth. Regarding
to
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manufacturing, there was 44 per
cent
in South Africa which is the highest one and only 18 in Japan which is the lowest. Vietnam's industries showed similar results,
that is
18
percent
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.
On the contrary
, there was a fifth part of the pie 22 per
cent
in Indonesia.
While
half of a hundred the greatest income from
coffee
was taken from delivery companies, only 10 per
cent
from exports. In the field of retailers, the point is doubled
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24 and comes up with 15 per
cent
from local producers.
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