The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.

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The pie chart provides data about

coffee

in three main fields

that

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consumption, amount of making and income all around the world.

Overall

, it can be seen that in the first pie, the highest percentage belongs to Europe,

while

in the second to South Africa. The third chart that shows the profit where the greatest was from Delivering.

To begin

with, the majority part Europeans

that is

41 per

cent

consume

coffee

while

the lowest is 8 per

cent

in Japan. In the USA 39 per

centof

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cent of

citizens drink

coffee

and 12 in other parts of the Earth. Regarding

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manufacturing, there was 44 per

cent

in South Africa which is the highest one and only 18 in Japan which is the lowest. Vietnam's industries showed similar results,

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percent

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per cent

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On the contrary

, there was a fifth part of the pie 22 per

cent

in Indonesia.

While

half of a hundred the greatest income from

coffee

was taken from delivery companies, only 10 per

cent

from exports. In the field of retailers, the point is doubled

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24 and comes up with 15 per

cent

from local producers.

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The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed .